In earlier drafts of "Tongue Tied," there was an additional scene after Captain Spectacular asked if he could come along too.
"Men. A ship full of them, and they have no idea where they're headed. How did Captain Margay ever put up with a ship full of men?"
"Just between you and me, Darling, I don't think Captain Margay is in a big hurry for her crew to find her." The Autopilot confided with Tonya in the seclusion of the curtain room.
"And now we have another man on board. They're all against me, you know. They hate the curtains I picked out."
"We girls just have to stick together. Okay?"
"Okay." affirmed Tonya.
I eventually dropped it because I thought it was more dramatic ending with Captain Spectacular's question. There's a place in the next episode, "The Glassy Planet," where the Autopilot tells Tonya, "I told you we girls have to stick together." I left that line in the third episode even though I cut this scene from the second. I thought the reader could infer from the line that Tonya and the Autopilot had been doing some girl-to-girl bonding on the ship.
Also in earlier drafts of "Tongue Tied," Captain Spectacular was named Captain Amazing. I thought Amazing was too generic and that Spectacular made him a little more distinct.
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